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Some Advice Please
« on: November 01, 2013, 02:22:31 PM »

I have a feature where there is a guy in a room named "Russell". He leaves the room and returns moments later and I want the audience to believe the person returning is Russell even though he won't be recognizable.

Currently when he returns, I have mentioned "An INDISTINGUISHABLE Russell" though I feel it may be confusing to the reader ? He has long rubber gloves and wears a gas mask.

Should I just do:-

RUSSELL'S POV THROUGH GAS MASK

Any ideas what the best way to handle this ?
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Re: Some Advice Please
« Reply #1 on: November 01, 2013, 06:10:35 PM »
Alex,

Just say something like.

Russell rushes in, but he's not recognizable in his long rubber glove and gas mask.

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Re: Some Advice Please
« Reply #2 on: November 01, 2013, 07:09:17 PM »
Alex,

Just say something like.

Russell rushes in, but he's not recognizable in his long rubber glove and gas mask.

Thanks Michael,

There are sections that flip around from being recognizable, to not being, and then back again.
I just want to make it really obvious as I don't want any confusion. I don't want to be repetitive with the not recognizable / recognizable either.

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Re: Some Advice Please
« Reply #3 on: November 01, 2013, 07:51:46 PM »
If he's wearing the rubber gloves and gas mask all those other times, you only have to mention that he's not recognizable the first time.

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Re: Some Advice Please
« Reply #4 on: November 06, 2013, 12:44:55 PM »
If he's wearing the rubber gloves and gas mask all those other times, you only have to mention that he's not recognizable the first time.

Thanks Michael, I will rewrite the 3 scenes that are affected and follow your suggestion.

Appreciated mate !!!!
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Re: Some Advice Please
« Reply #5 on: November 06, 2013, 09:11:05 PM »
If it is the same character I would be tempted to say he returns into the room wearing mask etc and leave it to the producer how they film this. They could do a close up of his face in the mask etc showing the audience it's him.

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Re: Some Advice Please
« Reply #6 on: November 07, 2013, 09:42:00 AM »
If it is the same character I would be tempted to say he returns into the room wearing mask etc and leave it to the producer how they film this. They could do a close up of his face in the mask etc showing the audience it's him.

Thanks Bill,

The thing is, it's not the same character though I want the audience to believe it is.

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